Moriah Leila

Hey, I will be reviewing this piece today. First of all, I thought it was very captivating. You're characters are obviously well developed. And your descriptions are very vivid. But ...

Hey there, I really enjoyed this piece. Is this a short story or are you going to make it into something longer? Either way, I love it. Your pace is ...

I agree with Nate, I wanted more details about the attack on the Jewish man. Could you give us more dialogue of the passengers inside the bus? And you did ...

Hey KJ, I know it has been awhile! I was so excited to read this. As always, it is awesome. You're soo talented, so please, don't ever stop writing. I ...

I apologize for the delay in my review, my computer was on the fritz, and it took me awhile before I was able to get back on here. But my ...

Hi there, I apologize for the long delay in my review. My internet was shut off and then my computer was out of commission, but now everything is good. I'll ...

Looove it! :shock: It is so imaginative, very unique, and I love the characters. I've got a couple nitpicks that haven't been covered yet, and then I will do an ...

Ello! I'll be your reviewer today (British accent). I love this story because I totally relate. I think everything sounds better in an accent. But my accents always seem to ...

Okay, so there were two things I almost immediately noticed about this story. First, it is really long. Consider breaking your chapters into smaller parts so that they are not ...

Corrections are in red. “N-no…. please… don’t… I need to put dinner on the t-table for my fa-family.” My grip on the knife tightened. “Hand it over, peasant!” I barked, ...

Corrections are in red. But you probably figured that out. Having noticed my father's markedly better spirits I decided to tell him my news. His face lit up and a ...

Corrections are in red. ''You ought to have been more careful Anetke. This is hardly the time to lose a finger,'' she said teasingly before turning back to clean up ...

So for the most part, everyone has covered what I was going to say. (i.e. New paragraphs start everytime someone new starts talking.) I thought it strange that even though ...

Well you said critique harshly, and so I shall. Or at least I will attempt to. And hopefully I don't overdo it. Either way, you'll be getting a critique from ...

Ok, so I have just three things that I want to cover, some of which has been addressed. But I wanted to be a little more in depth. 1. A ...